Ficlet: Fifty-Two - G, Angst

[serai]

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It's so cold here.

The light is grey, soft as frigid mist though I know the sun is shining outside. I gaze out my window, and my fingers in frozen claws pull the blanket closer about my shoulders. Even tucked up into a tight ball, I can't seem to get warm.

I shouldn't be abed still. I ought to get up, move about, smile. Try. Yet it is all I can do to breathe. The tear that gathers to break down my skin is so hot it burns. My throat pains me so.

It should have ended there, on the Mountain's side. I'm only lost now. There's nothing left.

The Shire. Where is the Shire?

From the hallway, voices kept low. But I hear them nonetheless. Worried whispers. Then a sob, and a comforting murmur. Not the birthday you had envisioned for me.

I'm sorry, Sam.

Comments

[elycia.livejournal.com]

Very, very poignant. Poor Sam. Poor Frodo! Fully expecting to die makes the living that much more difficult later, especially according to combat veterans. What is another birthday when you're supposed to have died?

Thanks for posting this; it's very thought-provoking.

And if you're still lonely, and you're still awake, come to Yahoo or AIM and chat! I'm elycia27 on YIM and EugenieVE on AIM.

[oxer12.livejournal.com]

This underscores why Frodo had to leave, though no one wanted him to.

Very sad. :(

[slipperieslope.livejournal.com]

Yes!

[myladylyssa.livejournal.com]

I love your work--it is so poignant. I love "my fingers in frozen claws." The image of Frodo alone curled up into a ball on what should be a festive day is so sad. He can't give, he can't abide. Lovely angst. Glimpses like this make it a little easier to accept Frodo's leaving.

[serai1.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I appreciate your kind words. Frodo's sadness and neglect (except for Sam and Rosie) have always seemed the hardest things to bear in the story for me.

[slipperieslope.livejournal.com]

The little claw hand and the fetal position and so very cold, just so very hopelessly sad. Disappointing everyone who wants the best for him. Saved the world and unable to save himself. This was very poignant and sad, thank you for sharing.

((hugs))

[serai1.livejournal.com]

THanks, hon. I'm glad you like it.

*hugs back*

[rubynye.livejournal.com]

Oh, that's beautiful and sad and full and amazing. Wow.

[serai1.livejournal.com]

:) Thanks, Ruby!

[danachan.livejournal.com]

Oh. Oh, Frodo. *heart hurts*

[serai1.livejournal.com]

*sob*

[malakhai.livejournal.com]

So much pain where there should only be beauty and peace.

[frodo-naatulien.livejournal.com]

Oh! So much sadness in so few words. That was very lovely, serai1.

*sniffle* *sniffle*

[serai1.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm glad it touched you. :)

[aprilkat.livejournal.com]

Ouch. Sums up Frodo's postquest pain in so few but effective words!

[angharad001.livejournal.com]

Most beautifully heart-breaking . . . thank you for it.

[serai1.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

[aelfgifu.livejournal.com]

cool journal. great icon. Wonderful drabble...but WHERE'S THE PORN???

oh yes, and now that we've met, why not friend me and know the terror that is Emma's journal! :)

[tempest-415.livejournal.com]

really nice short---I have no talent in writing at all, but I really love to read. you're lucky to have talent.
I'm actually checking in with you re last night. I was really tired just as we ended, and afraid I'd stop making any sense. If you wanted to talk about it more you can find my e-mail on my info page, I just put it up for you.